Sunday, 22 February 2009
Audience FeedbackAfter completing our thriller film, it was then shown to the rest of our media class so that we could get some audience feedback on the opening of our film.Some of the positive comments that we got included things to do with music – how it went well with what was going on, the changing of camera angles – the use of POV shots and the shot in the mirror, the way in which we incorporated a news scene into our film – which we filmed separately and then added in and the storyline – which was said to be eerie and attention grabbing, making the audience want to know more.The main negative comments that were given about our film were that some of the camera angles were slightly shaky – which gave it a slightly less professional look at some points, the fact that we should have shown the news report – we did have a shot of this but decided to cut it for some reason, and that there was too much dialogue - quite often there is no dialogue in a thriller opening but there was a few lines in ours.Most of the negative comments reflect people’s personal choices, i.e. some people don’t like to have dialogue in a thriller opening. These sorts of points would be taken into consideration if we were to make our opening again.Overall there was more positive feedback than negative feedback for our film opening, and as part of the audience feedback questionnaire that they were given each person was asked to rate how appealing the title of the film was, and then how appealing the opening was a whole.Our audience gave the title of our film 4.3/5 for appeal ability.And they gave our thriller opening as a whole a score of 4.43/5 for appeal ability.These are very good scores, above average. This means that our audience liked our film, even though there were still a few things which could have been done to improve it.We were very pleased with the scores from our audience feedback, and we also feel that we produced a good thriller opening sequence.
Friday, 5 December 2008
Location sheet
This is the location that we are going to be using for filming. It is Lauren's House which is located in Warrington. We will be using various rooms within this house including the bathroom, the stairs and hallway, and the living room.
Production Material - storyboard
Below is the storyboard for our thriller opening. It is a visual representation of the storyline. furthermore the shot list order is from the bottom to top shot 1 to shot 14
CHARACTER OUTLINES and script character profile
Edward Burns:
Edward Burns is a 25 year old mental patient at the MIOS Hospital, Manchester. He's been living at the hospital for five years
Growing up, Edward was raised in a big house by his Mum and Dad (Sarah and John Burns) he had two younger siblings, Jenny and Joe.
He didn't have a very good childhood, despite his wealth. His parents were extremely strict with very high standards. They wanted to raise the perfect son.
Edward being the oldest was the one that they beat down hard on. They sent him to the top schools in London to which he was but an average student there. Edward's home life, however, was far from great.
When he was the mere age of eight his father started sexually abusing him and beating him within an inch of his life for getting 'insufficient' grades such as B's and C's
Growing up, Edward turned very bitter towards his family. His mother did nothing to stop her husband treating Edward the way he did, she saw it as 'correct disciplinary rules'. She knew what her husband was doing to their eldest son and stood back and did nothing.
To the eyes of their neighbours the Burns family were a very well kept family. Everyone looked up to them and admired their wealth and power. Sarah liked the attention she was getting and wouldn't jeopardise that reputation by putting a stop to the horrible 'fathering' of Edward.
Edwards younger siblings grew up completely unaware of their fathers ways of 'teaching' and were therefore completely innocent to what their older brother had to put up with and were baffled by his shy, hide-away nature.
However, Edward thought they all knew and enjoyed to watch him suffer therefore hiding himself away and growing apart from his family. He tried to escape many times but, due to his fathers wealth and power over the local society, he was always found, beaten within an inch of his life, 'attacked by someone on the street' and sent to the nearest hospital for treatment.
Before Edward was brought to the MIOS Hospital he ended up in the Liverpool General Hospital numerous times covered in full body bruises and a face full of blood.
He stayed quiet about the attacks and no body knew what happened to him. Everyone was completely unaware of Edwards home life or where these bruises were coming from. His parents paid for his recovery and to be treated and he was eventually sent home after every visit.
Every time Edward would return home the Liverpool General would get calls from his parents about Edward having manic fits, shouting, screaming and the last call received was a terrified mother calling for the police because Edward had pulled a knife out and held it to his sisters neck threatening to kill her.
That's when he was brought to MIOS. At the time of his arrival at MIOS, Edward was 20 years old. The doctors at MIOS declared Edward insane and he's lived there ever since. He still wakes up of a night shouting and screaming incoherently. Only one word can ever be correctly heard. 'Alone'
Edward Burns is a 25 year old mental patient at the MIOS Hospital, Manchester. He's been living at the hospital for five years
Growing up, Edward was raised in a big house by his Mum and Dad (Sarah and John Burns) he had two younger siblings, Jenny and Joe.
He didn't have a very good childhood, despite his wealth. His parents were extremely strict with very high standards. They wanted to raise the perfect son.
Edward being the oldest was the one that they beat down hard on. They sent him to the top schools in London to which he was but an average student there. Edward's home life, however, was far from great.
When he was the mere age of eight his father started sexually abusing him and beating him within an inch of his life for getting 'insufficient' grades such as B's and C's
Growing up, Edward turned very bitter towards his family. His mother did nothing to stop her husband treating Edward the way he did, she saw it as 'correct disciplinary rules'. She knew what her husband was doing to their eldest son and stood back and did nothing.
To the eyes of their neighbours the Burns family were a very well kept family. Everyone looked up to them and admired their wealth and power. Sarah liked the attention she was getting and wouldn't jeopardise that reputation by putting a stop to the horrible 'fathering' of Edward.
Edwards younger siblings grew up completely unaware of their fathers ways of 'teaching' and were therefore completely innocent to what their older brother had to put up with and were baffled by his shy, hide-away nature.
However, Edward thought they all knew and enjoyed to watch him suffer therefore hiding himself away and growing apart from his family. He tried to escape many times but, due to his fathers wealth and power over the local society, he was always found, beaten within an inch of his life, 'attacked by someone on the street' and sent to the nearest hospital for treatment.
Before Edward was brought to the MIOS Hospital he ended up in the Liverpool General Hospital numerous times covered in full body bruises and a face full of blood.
He stayed quiet about the attacks and no body knew what happened to him. Everyone was completely unaware of Edwards home life or where these bruises were coming from. His parents paid for his recovery and to be treated and he was eventually sent home after every visit.
Every time Edward would return home the Liverpool General would get calls from his parents about Edward having manic fits, shouting, screaming and the last call received was a terrified mother calling for the police because Edward had pulled a knife out and held it to his sisters neck threatening to kill her.
That's when he was brought to MIOS. At the time of his arrival at MIOS, Edward was 20 years old. The doctors at MIOS declared Edward insane and he's lived there ever since. He still wakes up of a night shouting and screaming incoherently. Only one word can ever be correctly heard. 'Alone'
Character Outlines
INT. BATHROOM. NIGHT.
First, we get an angled mid-shot of the shower curtain. JENNY is whistling in the shower. Water is running. The main credits start rolling across the screen.
INT. HALL/LANDING. NIGHT.
Panning shot of JENNY walking out of the shower following her feet from the bathroom to her bedroom. JENNY is whistling throughout.JENNY comes out of the bedroom, fully dressed, for a night out with the girls. JENNY walks down the stairs, makes a cup of coffee and turns on the t.v.
INT. LIVING ROOM. NGHT.
T.V is turned on by JENNY. T.V Broadcast.
TV PRESENTER:
And now for tonight's top story. A mentally ill patient from the MIOS hospital in Manchester escaped three days ago. Police are still on the lookout but there is still no sign of him. Doctor's from MIOS are extremely concerned for the welfare of anyone he meets as he is, at this point in time, extremely unstable and could cause a major upset. Coming up on your screen is a picture of the patient who's name is Edward Burns. If you come across this man or see him anywhere, the doctor's at MIOS urge you to advice the police of his whereabouts right away as he can be a danger to you and himself...
JENNY cuts off the T.V before the picture is shown.
ZOOM IN to JENNY's face to show the shock and realization.The lights flicker off and on. There's a knock at the door. JENNY anxiously walks over to the door. Camera follows behind her with a tracking shot. JENNY walks right out to the edge of her road.
CUTS TO EDWARDS's POV running inside the house, looking back at JENNY and up the stairs.
BACK TO JENNY.
Long shot of her walking through the hall towards the camera looking nervous. There's a bang upstairs and she turns around nervously. REVERSE-ANGLE EDITING to show her reaction.
JENNY:
Hello? ...Is anybody there?...*shakes head and turns back to the living room*
EDWARD's POV shot from behind JENNY as he sneaks up behind her. EDWARD grabs JENNY from behind, puts a chloroformed cloth to her mouth and drags her through the hall and out the door.
First, we get an angled mid-shot of the shower curtain. JENNY is whistling in the shower. Water is running. The main credits start rolling across the screen.
INT. HALL/LANDING. NIGHT.
Panning shot of JENNY walking out of the shower following her feet from the bathroom to her bedroom. JENNY is whistling throughout.JENNY comes out of the bedroom, fully dressed, for a night out with the girls. JENNY walks down the stairs, makes a cup of coffee and turns on the t.v.
INT. LIVING ROOM. NGHT.
T.V is turned on by JENNY. T.V Broadcast.
TV PRESENTER:
And now for tonight's top story. A mentally ill patient from the MIOS hospital in Manchester escaped three days ago. Police are still on the lookout but there is still no sign of him. Doctor's from MIOS are extremely concerned for the welfare of anyone he meets as he is, at this point in time, extremely unstable and could cause a major upset. Coming up on your screen is a picture of the patient who's name is Edward Burns. If you come across this man or see him anywhere, the doctor's at MIOS urge you to advice the police of his whereabouts right away as he can be a danger to you and himself...
JENNY cuts off the T.V before the picture is shown.
ZOOM IN to JENNY's face to show the shock and realization.The lights flicker off and on. There's a knock at the door. JENNY anxiously walks over to the door. Camera follows behind her with a tracking shot. JENNY walks right out to the edge of her road.
CUTS TO EDWARDS's POV running inside the house, looking back at JENNY and up the stairs.
BACK TO JENNY.
Long shot of her walking through the hall towards the camera looking nervous. There's a bang upstairs and she turns around nervously. REVERSE-ANGLE EDITING to show her reaction.
JENNY:
Hello? ...Is anybody there?...*shakes head and turns back to the living room*
EDWARD's POV shot from behind JENNY as he sneaks up behind her. EDWARD grabs JENNY from behind, puts a chloroformed cloth to her mouth and drags her through the hall and out the door.
Treatment for alone
Alone? is a mysterious film.
A tension building mystery of a mentally ill patient on the rampage
Synopsis.A deranged mental patient from the MIOS Manchester Hospital has escaped and is on to the rampage to continue his journey in killing the remaining members of his family. Will he succeed? Only time will tell.
Plot Outline
Beginning: Jenny Burns is getting ready for a night out with her girlfriends when she is presented with a shock from her past.
Middle: Edward Burns (mental patient) successfully kills four members of his family. Jenny his sister, Sarah his mother, Joe his brother and Jackie his aunt.
End: Edward Burns is on his way to kill his 'beloved' father. The police are ready to capture him. Last shot is Edward manically laughing in the middle of a white room, wearing a straight jacket
Opening scene.We begin with a mid shot of a shower curtain. Jenny is whistling peacefully. She gets out the shower and gets changed. She has 15 minutes to spare so she makes a cup of coffee and turns on the tv. She gets the shock of her life when she hears about the escape of her mentally ill brother Edward. She turns the tv off and the lights flick on and off. She hears a knock at the door and walks anxiously towards the door to check. Edward sneaks in through the door when Jenny walks towards the main road and he runs upstairs. Jenny returns inside and locks the front door and hears a noise from upstairs. Suddenly Edward grabs Jenny from behind and puts a chloroformed cloth over her face and drags her through the hall and out the door.
Target Audience.The film should not be viewed by anyone under the age of 15 as the film has disturbing images and situations. Because of this, our group decided on a 15 certificate. This film should appeal to young adults and adults. Our film contains no graphic violence or sex but it does hint at sexual abuse.
A tension building mystery of a mentally ill patient on the rampage
Synopsis.A deranged mental patient from the MIOS Manchester Hospital has escaped and is on to the rampage to continue his journey in killing the remaining members of his family. Will he succeed? Only time will tell.
Plot Outline
Beginning: Jenny Burns is getting ready for a night out with her girlfriends when she is presented with a shock from her past.
Middle: Edward Burns (mental patient) successfully kills four members of his family. Jenny his sister, Sarah his mother, Joe his brother and Jackie his aunt.
End: Edward Burns is on his way to kill his 'beloved' father. The police are ready to capture him. Last shot is Edward manically laughing in the middle of a white room, wearing a straight jacket
Opening scene.We begin with a mid shot of a shower curtain. Jenny is whistling peacefully. She gets out the shower and gets changed. She has 15 minutes to spare so she makes a cup of coffee and turns on the tv. She gets the shock of her life when she hears about the escape of her mentally ill brother Edward. She turns the tv off and the lights flick on and off. She hears a knock at the door and walks anxiously towards the door to check. Edward sneaks in through the door when Jenny walks towards the main road and he runs upstairs. Jenny returns inside and locks the front door and hears a noise from upstairs. Suddenly Edward grabs Jenny from behind and puts a chloroformed cloth over her face and drags her through the hall and out the door.
Target Audience.The film should not be viewed by anyone under the age of 15 as the film has disturbing images and situations. Because of this, our group decided on a 15 certificate. This film should appeal to young adults and adults. Our film contains no graphic violence or sex but it does hint at sexual abuse.
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